Thursday, June 19, 2008

Mrs Chicken and the Hungry Crocodile

Hi kids! I really like all your cool stories about Mrs Chicken and the Hungry Crocodile. I have tried to write a story ending too. Please can you tell me what you think of it? Is there anything I can do to make it better?

the hungry crocodile was sorry she had tried to eat mrs chicken. i am sorry she said. She offered to take mrs chicken and her chicks back across the river. yes please said mrs chicken. the chicks all clambered aboard crocodile's back and then they set off across the river. PLEASE come and see me again soon, begged the crocodile. I WON'T! laughed mrs chicken. mrs chicken and her chicks ran up the bank happily. they never ever went near the river again and always took their baths in puddles!

16 comments:

Anonymous said...

zook you did a big long ending that is fantastick

Anonymous said...

i loved it zook

Anonymous said...

cool story Zook

Anonymous said...

COOL zook

Anonymous said...

nice ending zook

Anonymous said...

you have a long story Zook.

Anonymous said...

Your story is excellent

Anonymous said...

FANTASTIC!

Anonymous said...

nice story ending Zooooooook!

Anonymous said...

I liked your long story.

Anonymous said...

It is a long story.It is good because you check your spelling

Anonymous said...

is it hard writing when your an alien

Anonymous said...

well done zook good work!

Anonymous said...

Remember Zook next time you right a story look out for your CAITAL LETTERS!

Anonymous said...

How did you write so much Zook. That is really cool.

Anonymous said...

I rember mrs chicken and the hungrey crockeydille.